A Mess of Nouns, Pronouns, Adjectives, Adverbs, Verbs, and Possessives (IIC)

Part IIA gave you an overview of the kinds of deficiencies we see in Harriet’s use of the English language, particularly focusing on incorrect words and compound words.

Part IIB examined the application of singulars and plurals, verb tenses, and redundancies in a cross-section of Klausner’s reviews.

This section discusses problems with nouns, pronouns, adjectives, adverbs, and verbs that were readily apparent in the 600 review sampling over about a three-month period.

Below is a list of Harriet’s use of pronouns and the context in which they are used.  She has a particularly difficult time with “who” and “whom”.  Both are used indiscriminately, without rhyme or reason; and, from time to time, she actually gets it right.  The list ends with improper choices of pronouns.

•	Varic offers to marry Princess Melaia, who Trevin loves.
•	as we try to identify who the culprit is amidst a house filled with suspects; of whom most detested the deceased.
•	her spouse is nice Dave whom has no idea who the woman he has slept with for the past sixteen years really is;
•	she informs her paramour he has forty-eight hours to decide who he wants.
•	She has no idea of whom he is talking about
•	Gregarious, Mr. O'Neal grew up impoverish, but had steady role models who he credits for keeping him.
•	However, his concern is with whom murdered Senator Mark Baines
•	but whom, where and when are unknown Lucien is surprised by his feelings for the hybrid slayer Lycan who he marks as his
•	This is a super fantasy starring Cain and Abel Lycan siblings and the hybrid who they battle over.
•	He demands she tell him who she sold the chalice to
•	he is an America "sanctioned" assassin who takes on those who the Feds (civilian and military) for whatever reason cannot eliminate
•	the teenage sorcerer who heaven will kill
•	He is upset that his girlfriend Dr. Maggie who he rescued from a fire
•	She has viable candidates who she cares about,
•	Adam feels a need to protect the brother who for the first time in their lives he has acted disloyal towards.
•	his belief in whom she is makes for a wonderful late nineteenth century historical.
•	she struggles with who to trust
•	Black Jack knows him and his crews must escape
•	yet Faith is attracted to Tom and him to her.
•	Two teenagers Tony and Jill fall into a hole where he finds a box

One of the underlying issues the above list shows us is that the author doesn’t recognize objects within a sentence.  An object is on the receiving end of some kind of action or notice and sometimes is what a subject and/or verb point to.  In some instances, an object can take over from the subject and drive the sentence.  This is seventh-grade English.

What do we see when we look at nouns?  The odyssey of Harriet’s written reviews continues on its course of bizarre English by expanding nouns into adjectives adverbs, and verbs.

•	especially after spending time at his great- grandmother's opulence abode
•	in the fratricide civil war
•	a wonderful contemporary that intertwines the three sexcapades subplots
•	starring a wonderful overwhelmed protagonist dealing with her widow mom's advanced Alzheimer
•	a close scrutiny of magic's corruption effect.
•	He condemned the Vikings to cultural assimilation extinction
•	When her widow father suffered a heart attack

Adjectives, anyone?  I have, quite frankly, never thought to use an adjective as a noun, verb, or adverb.  But here they are.

•	an enjoyable tale starring a shy big babe academia with a southern upbringing
•	The latest Chow police procedural is a complicated historical that combines the international debate
•	His assignment is to retrieve a stolen cylinder before a catastrophic matching that of the Kollaps occurs.
•	On his side he has geriatric Edie, Frankie and most important his receptionist Polly.
•	Gemma proves she can be equatorial hot.
•	the vampire and the dragon shifter face dilemmas that could end tragic.
•	he also makes the euphemistic titled "enhanced interrogation" techniques
•	yet remains the avaricious same since the wave.

I’ll bet you that verbs get some pretty interesting Klausner treatment, too.  Of course, if you bet against me, you would lose.

•	Fast-paced from the moment Abigail receives the nightmarish call and never slows down until the final marital confrontation
•	They were reported seen together.
•	In 1763, to the Ton, even to the impoverish aristocrats, Leo remains a commoner beneath them.
•	Ashley March keeps her enthused attentive readers wondering who

What’s left of easy English grammar?  You guessed it!  Adverbs.  Yet again, we find a new construct of the English language where adverbs become nouns, verbs, and adjectives.

•	leading to his father's mostly abandonment when he was in his twenties
•	friends begin to vanish and subsequently body parts arrive in packages
•	The mural contains evil demonic Legion. The first few chapters establish the always in troublesome hero,
•	Loaded with action while rotating effortlessly perspective
•	Adam feels a need to protect the brother who for the first time in their lives he has acted disloyal towards.
•	the lights out bureaucratic operating procedure that metamorphic denotes lights out on hope

Finally, before moving to Section IID, we’re going to check out how Harriet approaches the issues of possessives.  Like all the quick studies before, this one proved enlightening.  Simple bolding of characters with no brackets is incorrect.  Bolded letters and apostrophes in brackets are additions to show you how the possessives should be written:

•	Due to Magnus the vampire[’s] biting Sunny instead of Rayne
•	This leads to Julia[’s] and Annie[’s] seeing each for the first time
•	Sheriff[’s] deputy Boyd Davies has dreams
•	readers will enjoy this engaging thriller even with the protagonists[’] lacking depth.
•	Michelle[’s] former high school BFF Carly Williams manages Blackberry Island Inn.
•	Katrina exacerbated the fairies[’] assault for those living on the Delta
•	county's sheriff[’s] department
•	the Demon King shows his adaptability when he possesses Ed Marks'[s] body
•	She did not anticipate Riley[’s] inheriting her ability
•	Precious'[s]  sense of right and wrong  Professor Eloisa James'[s] mom died from cancer.
•	They are Toots'[s] stepson entertainment lawyer Chris Clay and actress Laura Leigh have vanished.
•	Toots[’s] daughter Abby, editor in chief of the tabloid Informer
•	their respective proud fathers rigidly adhere to tradition even if it means their clans' fade into oblivion
•	fans will relish the trek into Stevens[es]’ world
•	Parker Harrington Welles'[s] preschool age son Nicky
•	agents of Bonaparte want to deploy the Vincents[es’] (and other adepts[’]) magical skills
•	true friendship as she has with her roommates Miranda the witch and Della the vampire enhances one[’]s power
•	the Rogers[es]' home was burglarized with their artifacts.
•	he is doing his incompetent boss'[s] work
•	as Vidarian's struggles with the moral implications of what he wrought.

Whumpf.  I am not trying to pick myself up off the floor.  I’m looking for my lost contact.

What are we looking at here?  There’s bad English and then there’s bad English.

We’re not quite done yet.  There’s one more section, Part IID dealing with prepositions, use of the word “as” (I almost titled it “Harriet’s Ases Problem”, but thought better of it), and the weird” catchall category for stuff that defies description.

Click here to go to Part IID.

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