Prepositions, "Ases", and the Weird and Wacky (IID)

Part IIA gave you an overview of the kinds of deficiencies we see in Harriet’s use of the English language, particularly focusing on incorrect words and compound words.

Part IIB, examined the application of singulars and plurals, verb tenses, and redundancies in a cross-section of Klausner’s reviews.

Part IIC talked about Harriet’s problems with pronouns and possessives and how she interchanges nouns, adjectives, adverbs, verbs.

This section studies prepositions; use of the word “as”; sentences without subjects or verbs, or both; and sentences that are just too strange to call much of anything.

Prepositions became a very interesting study. In looking at their overuse and wrong choice of prepositions, we discover that prepositions tend to derail Harriet’s sentence structures, sending her off on little adventures in creative English.  Oh, those pesky little two, three, and four letter words!  Pay attention, because some of them are very funny.

Harriet’s Wording	Correct Wording
an intriguing biography that combines knowledge obtained from family correspondence mostly written by the upper class heroine with the state of Victorian art and aristocratic history.	an intriguing biography that combines knowledge obtained from family correspondence mostly written by the upper class heroine about the state of Victorian art and aristocratic history.
The ensemble cast to include the lead trio,	The ensemble cast including the lead trio
they use every legal technique known to the American economy to reduce costs to as close to ground zero as possible	they use every legal technique known to the   American economy to reduce costs as close to ground zero as possible
as both prefer the attraction just go away	as both prefer that  the attraction would just go away
Complex as the audience learns much about Aaron, Dorothy and their marriage, as love does not denote happiness and camaraderie, as it can be destructive as well as constructive.	Complex as the audience learns much about   Aaron, Dorothy and their marriage.  Love does not denote happiness and camaraderie since it can be  both destructive and constructive.
she finds his caring of his family nice	she finds his caring for his family nice
she has an innate knack of knowing when someone makes something up	she has an innate knack  for knowing when someone makes something up
Jessica decides to take a stroll in the beach	Jessica decides to take a stroll on the beach
his boorishness is caused by his love at first sight of her leaving him unable to speak	his boorishness is caused by love at first sight leaving him unable to speak
On Atlantis God as with its predecessors, he succeeds.	In Atlantis God, as with its predecessors, he succeeds.
as the highest ranked female cop on the Kansas City, Missouri police department	as the highest ranked female cop in the Kansas City, Missouri police department
A professional with passion on the job	A professional with passion for the job
the trio want to do what is best to the child	the trio wants to do what is best for the child
In return for saving his life Coyote asks Atticus reciprocate.	In return for saving his life, Coyote asks Atticus “to” reciprocate
assault  for	assault “on”
Darlene and CPA Brad Henderson relocate the family from Houston for Round Top	Darlene and CPA Brad Henderson relocate the family from Houston to Round Top
temptation in the father of a student surfaces has Darlene considering what she never thought in all her years of marriage.	temptation in the form of a student’s father has Darlene considering what she never thought “of” in all her years of marriage.
the Rogers' home was burglarized with their artifacts.	the Rogerses’ home was burglarized “for” their artifacts.
a horde of like him will descent on Luther's Bend	a similar horde will descend on Luther’s Bend
she struggles with her ethics as to doing the right thing	she struggles with her ethics over  doing the right thing
Elise LeRoy the Oscar winning Otherworld actress receives a threatening letter signed by blood drops	Elise LeRoy, the Oscar winning Otherworld   actress, receives a threatening letter in blood drops
what made humanity unique is compassion for the nurturing of others	what made humanity unique is compassion and the nurturing of others
understanding his agency's mantra is the opposite of the marines with "left behind".	understanding his agency’s mantra is opposite to the Marines’ “Left Behind”.
In remittance to his being saved from eternal   torment	In remittance for being saved from eternal from
a rare look inside the Missionary of Charity especially Mary Johnson's work as Sister Donata alongside of Mother.	a rare look inside the Missionary of Charity, especially Mary Johnson’s work as Sister Donata alongside Mother.
he travels to the Isle of Jago to probe the archbishop's homicide.	he travels to the Isle of Jago to probe into the archbishop’s homicide.
The Jedi and the sibling follow leads into the heart of the perilous Hutts in which crime lords rule.	The Jedi and the sibling follow leads into the heart of the perilous Hutts where crime lords rule.
Sir James Smiley, Esq. sends a letter to Thea Martin asking for her to come see him.	Sir James Smiley, Esq., sends a letter to Thea Martin asking her to come see him.
the tree fell in his chest.	the tree fell on his chest.
His plan is to leave the enforcement business which he is unaware of that one just does not retire from the Ozark mob	Unaware that one just does not retire, his plan is to leave the enforcement business.
a powerful timely thriller with applications in our society.	a powerful, timely thriller with application to our society
filled with remorse with what he is doing to David behind his back	filled with remorse over what he is doing to David behind his back
Grandpa Atherton steals the show of this fast-paced whodunit	Grandpa Atherton steals the show in this fast-paced whodunit
James hires Cat to help him with his outside of baseball business activities.	James hires Cat to help him with his external baseball business activities.
he turns in to a Pixie due to Chicory's magic	he turns into a Pixie due to Chicory’s magic
He sort of as sees her frequently at the station	He sees her frequently at the station
a wonderful tale of a couple still in love as they were in their Aggie days	a wonderful tale of a couple as much in love as they were in their Aggie days.
to work as a lifeguard and teacher of young children at the local pool alongside of David.	to work as a lifeguard and teacher of young   children at the local pool alongside David.
Kathy Cooke assigns her Red Cell duo to uncover out why the China leaders feel immune	Kathy Cooke assigns her Red Cell duo to uncover why China leaders feel immune
She demands Benjamin's widow Mary to tell her the truth with no omissions or deceptions.	She demands that Benjamin’s widow Mary tell her the truth with no omissions or deceptions.
he cannot grant to her what she covets	he cannot grant her what she covets

We’re going to examine Hattie’s overuse of the word “as”.  It’s a tiny word with lots of different meanings, but it’s Klausner’s go-to word for just about everything.  It is one of the many reasons that her sentences become garbled, irritating, or impossible to follow.

•	Complex as the audience learns much about Aaron, Dorothy and their marriage, as love does not denote happiness and camaraderie, as it can be destructive as well as constructive.
•	Grandpa Atherton steals the show of this fast-paced whodunit as he and his granddaughter team up as mall sleuths
•	she struggles with her ethics as to doing the right thing
•	Rike arrives accusing Joarr of losing the chalice as disaster has struck their race as he explains the young are dying
•	On Atlantis God as with its predecessors, he succeeds.
•	Harold is terrific as he deals with immense pressure as he expects his destiny is death, but remains steadfast on his quest as he knows in the end he must go it alone.

Finally, we near the end with the last category—Weird and Wacky.  These are examples of strings of words that are too bizarre to fit anywhere else, but show a certain disconnect with the English language.

•	The third Quent dark fantasy (see The House On Durrow Street, and The Magicians and Mrs. Quent) super thriller with several stunning bit plausible twists.
•	The Westmann Islands near retired Inspector Lieffson suspect Markus,
•	While, the key players are fully developed so that the audience understands what motivates each of them.
•	Although a major sidebar detracts from the fun storyline, but fans will enjoy the latest escapedes of the Young Corinthians.
•	Now a widow with two sons (seven years old Jonathan and five years old Christopher) hopes instead that it is a lucrative matchmaking commission like the one she did for Peter Goodfellow.
•	However, the siblings' relationship and the life and times of the ABB in the late 1960s that haunt this winner especially the climatic death of Duane as the author portrays his feelings of survivor guilt.
•	Although his healing from what appears to be near crippling PTSD seems too miraculous but fans will enjoy their journey.

Well.  Wow.  Hmmmm.   Uh . . .   Hmmmmmm.   (Picking my jaw up from the floor.)  Let me take some time to gather myself because I just don’t know what to say.

Does this look like meeting the core standard of English writing, communication, and storytelling skills to you?   Worse yet, Klausner’s mad math skills make her English skills look like pure genius.  

Continue to Part III, Killing Me Softly with Your Review

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